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第四期 大作文 As is symbolically depicted in the drawing, two tourists are taking sightseeing on a small boat while discarding their picnic leftovers casually into a lake. Unfortunately, the lake is already littered and teamed with flow rubbish like plastic containers, fish-bones, banana peel, watermelon rind, bottles, tins, food wrappings, and so on. The caption indicates,"after " the travel or "me" in the travel.
   The purpose of the painter is to show us that utmost importance should be attached to the issue of environmental protection. On the one hand, tourism, as a multibillion-dollar business, is booming everywhere. It so happens that, we develop tourism to promote the growth of economy and seem to ignore its negative effects on the environment. Nevertheless, there are not concerns that we can shrug off lightly. On the other hand, tourism has exerted great pressure on the environment we are living in: water is polluted, the ecological system is disturbed, and the natural resources have been excessively used.
   From my point of view, we must work out some concrete solutions to solve this matter. Undoubtedly, tourism can not be banned in any country as it help to shore up the economy in places which have few sources of income. However, it is imperative for us to enhance people's awareness to rectify this situation and reinforce the management of tourism to protect our natural environment. Accordingly, the earth is our home ,we must take care of it for ourselves and our descendants.
   
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As is symbolically depicted in the drawing, two tourists are taking sightseeing on a small boat while discarding their picnic leftovers casually into a lake. Unfortunately, the lake is already littered and teamed with flow rubbish like plastic containers, fish-bones(分成两个词), banana peel, watermelon rind, bottles, tins, food wrappings, and so on. 【The caption indicates,(去掉) "after " the travel or "me" in the travel. 】(其实这幅图中没有这句话) The purpose of the painter is to show us that utmost importance should be attached to the issue of environmental protection. On the one hand, tourism, as a multibillion-dollar business, is booming everywhere. It so happens that, we develop tourism to promote the growth of economy and seem to ignore its negative effects on the environment. Nevertheless, there are not concerns that we can shrug off lightly. On the other hand, tourism has exerted great pressure on the environment we are living in: water is polluted, the ecological system is disturbed, and the natural resources have been excessively used.From my point of view, we must work out some concrete solutions to solve this matter. Undoubtedly, tourism can not be banned in any country as it help(用第三人称单数) to shore up the economy in places which have few sources of income. However, it is imperative for us to enhance people's awareness to rectify this situation and reinforce the management of tourism to protect our natural environment. Accordingly, the earth is our home , we must take care of it for ourselves and our descendants.点评:16分写的不错,思路是对的,尽量保持在200词左右,不要超出太多。
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