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Dear Bob,
   I am writing to apologize for that I had forgotten to return the music CD which one you lend me.I had put it in my luggage and want to return it in the airport,but arrive airport late and so hurry board the plane reasult I forget it.
   I plan to buy a new one for you on internet,don't say no to me,because I know that is the most favorite of you.The bad of this way is that will cost long time until you receive it.If you don't mind,we can also do like this:buy a new one by yourself ,then tell me the price I will pay the money to your card.
   Please allow me to say sorry again,and let me know which is the best way to make it good.
   Yours,
   Li Ming
    考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Bob, I am writing to apologize for that I had forgotten to return the music CD which one(去掉) you lend me. I had put it in my luggage and want to return it in the airport, but (缺主语)arrive(用过去时) airport late and so hurry board(用过去时) the plane reasult(拼写错误) I forget it. I plan to buy a new one for you on internet(Internet),(缺少连词) don't say no to me, because I know that is the most favorite of you. The bad (缺少一个名词)of this way is that (加it)will cost long time until you receive it. If you don't mind, we can also do like this: buy a new one by yourself ,then tell me the price I will pay the money to your card. Please allow me to say sorry again, and let me know which is the best way to make it good. Yours, Li Ming点评:5分基本上是仿写的模板内容,另外错误比较多,表达需要加强。
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