考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(282)
考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。考研英语待批改作文：
不知道写什么询问内容，就把王江涛老师的考研英语高分写作的一个范文的题目拿来写了。谢谢老师批改，辛苦了。
As part of a student social survey project ,you are leading a group to visit an exhibition in a small town.Write a letter to ask for information regarding such things as :
1) the contents of the exhibition
2) the dates of its opening and closing,and
3) any discounts.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a student of Munich University. As I am planning to complete a report of a student social survey project,I would like to leading a group to visit an exhibition in you town.So, I will express my gratitude if you could provided me some information about the exhibition.
Firstly, please range a list of the exhibition regarding such as company names , subjects , products or services etc.Secondly , I should know the times of the exhibition's opening and closing.Thirdly, what would you mind if discount prices for us,considering the 20 person take part in the exhibition and we are students which no salary.
Thanks to your kindness if you convenience deliver those information to obama@hotmail.com . I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a student of Munich University. As I am planning to complete a report of a student social survey project, I would like to leading（用动词原形） a group to visit an exhibition in you（用所有格形式your） town. So, I will express my gratitude if you could provided（用动词原形） me some information about the exhibition.
Firstly, please range a list of the exhibition regarding such as company names, subjects, products or services etc. Secondly, I should know the times（time是不可数名词） of the exhibition's opening and closing. Thirdly, what would（注意这是疑问句，建议把us后的逗号改成问号，后面的布冯重启一句） you mind if discount prices for us, considering the 20 person take part in the exhibition and we are students which（改成with） no salary.
Thanks to your kindness if you convenience（修饰后面的动词，要使用副词） deliver those information to obama@hotmail.com . I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
点评：5-6分字数超出的比较多，另外错误比较多。建议同学再分析一下范文。
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