考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(187)
考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir:
I am writing to ask infermation about the company.
I want to join your company this month .First of all,I want to know which job is vacant.HR would be preferable,because I have worked this job for three years.Second,how much moneyis my salary?I had to pay for my house,so I must get a good salary.Thrid,the address of work place .The treffic is heavy in this city.Particular in morning or afternoon.So it's best the working place near my home.
I would be grataful to receive a prompt reply.
your friend
Liming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir:（因为不知道是男士还是女士，用Sir or Madam，后面用逗号）
I am writing to ask infermation（拼写错误） about the company.
I want to join your company this month .First of all, I want to know which job is vacant.HR would be preferable, because I have worked this job（which job？） for three years. Second, how much money is my salary?（问到薪水的时候委婉一点，I want to know some details about my salary and subsidies.） I had（用现在时have） to pay for my house, so I must get a good salary. Thrid（拼写错误）, the address of work place .The treffic（拼写错误） is heavy in this city. Particular in morning or afternoon.（这不是一句完整的话） So it's best the working place near my home.
I would be grataful（拼写错误） to receive a prompt reply. your（Your） friend（加逗号）
Liming（m大写）点评：4-5分第一段过于简短，可以再加一句说我想加入贵公司，然后再说想询问一些相关信息。第二段虽然比较有条理，但是写的不是很好，要注意语气和用语。建议多看看范文。
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