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Dear Sir or Madam,I am a faithful client of China Construction Bank. I express my appreciation to you for your prompt attention. The trouble which I meet is that I know nothing about personal online banking services.So, could you offer me some detailed information regarding it such as how and where to apply at first? Secondly, how much shall I pay for the handing charges? Finally, what kind of the personal online banking services do I have since the opening of the account?I am convinced that you are so kind that you could help me to understand relevant knowledge of it and apply this account. Show my sincere gratitude to you for you read my letter again. Look forward to your reply.Yours sincerely,Li Ming
   
   考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sir or Madam,I am a faithful client of China Construction Bank. I express my appreciation to you for your prompt attention. The trouble which I meet is that I know nothing about personal online banking services.So, could you offer me some detailed information regarding it such as how and where to apply at first? Secondly, how much shall I pay for the handing charges? Finally, what kind of the(去掉,因为不知道指的是什么,所以不用定冠词) personal online banking services do I have since the opening of the account?I am convinced that you are so kind that you could help me to understand relevant knowledge of it and apply this account. Show my sincere gratitude to you for you read my letter again. Look(应该是looking) forward to your reply.Yours sincerely,Li Ming点评:7分写的不错的,结尾要简洁。作文在100词上下浮动。
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