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Dear Sir or Madam,
   I am a senior the Department of Business Administration. I have read your advertisement on the internet for a staff member, and should be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for the post.
   I am sure that I am qualified for it. First, not only do my qualifications and experience make me a perfect candidate for it,my cheerful personality is well suited to the position .second, my hobbies include sports and music. Last, enclosed with the letter is my resume, which further details my previous academic qualification and work experience.
   Finally, if you need to know more about me, please contact me at 010—**** ****. I would appreciate it if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details of my background and training.
   Yours sincerely,
   Li Ming
   
   考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a senior(加介词form) the Department of Business Administration. I have read your advertisement on the internet(Internet) for a staff member, and(加主语I) should be grateful if you could consider me favorably as an applicant for the post. I am sure that I am qualified for it. First, not only do my qualifications and experience make me a perfect candidate for it,my cheerful personality is well suited to the position .second(Second), my hobbies include sports and music.(这句话没有显示出与应聘有很大关系) Last, enclosed with the letter is my resume, which further details my previous academic qualification and work experience. Finally, if you need to know more about me, please contact me at 010—**** ****. I would appreciate it if you could grant me an interview so that I could explain in more details of my background and training. Yours sincerely, Li Ming点评:5分不知道你应聘的职位是什么,所以感觉你第二段的用意,第二段的内容不要太空洞,与其写自己的爱好,不如用一两句话介绍自己的专业知识和工作经验。
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