考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(81)
考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。考研英语待批改作文：
Dear sir or madam, Attracted by your company's strong technological basis and promising future in computer area.I would like to be a member of your staff.last week Iheard that your firm were seeking employees whose major is computer programing from one of my friends.I assume that I will be competent with the job your company offers.With four-year study in computer science during my college life,I was eqquipped with a great deal of professional knowledge.Besides,I have worked in Nokia Corporation for 2 years,which provides me valuable experience and ability to coorporate with others.What's more,I was the one you have been searching for who is prudent,careful,hard-working and persistent.Your prompt attention will be appreciated.Looking forward to your reply and sending me more information about the application.Yourssincerely,LiMing
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear sir or madam（Sir or Madam）,
Attracted by your company's strong technological basis and promising future in computer area.（改成逗号） I would like to be a member of your staff. last（Last） week I heard that your firm were seeking employees whose major is computer programing（拼写错误） from one of my friends. I assume that I will be competent with the job your company offers.
With four-year study in computer science during my college life, I was eqquipped（拼写错误） with a great deal of professional knowledge. Besides, I have worked in Nokia Corporation for 2 years, which provides me valuable experience and ability to coorporate（拼写错误） with others. What's more, I was the one you have been searching for who is prudent, careful, hard-working and persistent.
Your prompt attention will be appreciated. Looking forward to your reply and sending me more information about the application.（这一部分去掉）
Yourssincerely,
LiMing
点评：7分
写的不错。注意拼写和一些细节性问题。
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