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考研英语待批改作文:
Dear Sir or Madam,
   I am a graduation of Changde university.I am writing for apply for the position of management in designing software.I am so excited when I saw the advertised in the Internet.
   My main courses include Computer and Business Management in the university.I worked in Changde computer limited liability computer as the secretary to manager of designing.I am familarity with Microsoft Word and Excel.I have a strong professinal spirit and cheeful personality.Ability to work independently and outstanding organizational skills are my strenghs.
   Thank you for your time and consideration.Looking forward to your reply.
    Yours sincerely
    Li Ming
   考研英语作文批改点评如下:
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a graduation(graduate) of Changde university(u大写). I am writing for apply for the position of management in designing software. I am so excited when I saw the advertised in(用介词on) the Internet.My main courses include Computer and Business Management in the university. I worked in Changde computer limited liability computer(这里是个公司吗?) as the secretary to manager of designing. I am familarity(拼写错误) with Microsoft Word and Excel. I have a strong professinal(拼写错误) spirit and cheeful(拼写错误) personality. Ability to work independently and outstanding organizational skills are my strenghs(拼写错误).Thank you for your time and consideration. Looking forward to your reply. Yours sincerelyLi Ming点评:5-6分拼写错误有点多,第二段针对性不是很强,熟练应用word和excel不一定就会涉及软件。要有针对性的写。
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