考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(126)
考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam ,
As I am planning to have a travel in this winter vacation, I have decided to place an order of a digital camera with due considerration of the good reputation of your store and the high guality of your digital products.
Firstly,please give me particular accounts as regards manufacturers, pixels, colours and prices of these camera which you think suit to me. Secondly, I also need to know the terms of payment and after-sell service. Thirdly, I wonder if it is convenient for you to deliver the digital camera by EMS to **University by November 1,2011.
I would like to express my gratitude for you kind consideration of my requests. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Your sincerely,
LiMing
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, As I am planning to have a travel in this winter vacation, I have decided to place an order of a digital camera with due considerration（拼写错误） of the good reputation of your store and the high guality（拼写错误） of your digital products.Firstly, please give me particular accounts as regards manufacturers, pixels, colours and prices of these camera（单复数保持一致） which you think suit to me. Secondly, I also need to know the terms of payment and after-sell service. Thirdly, I wonder if it is convenient for you to deliver the digital camera by EMS to **University by November 1, 2011.I would like to express my gratitude for you（应该用所有格your）kind consideration of my requests. I look forward to hearing from you soon.Your（应该用Yours）sincerely,Li（这里不用空格）Ming 点评：7-8分写的很好，要注意细节，相信你可以避免这些错误的。
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