考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(77)
考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam， I’m writing this letter to see whether I meet the qualifications of the physician which is your hospital’s opening job. I noticed the news when I was searching for a job on the Internet.I have graduated from Nanjing University of Traditional Chinese Medicine for three years. Now I am a medical practitioner in a private hospital in Nanjing., and have more experiences in clinical practice. The work is pretty good, however, it's so far from my home of Luoyang. So working in Luoyang is my dream. If I got this opportunity, I will work hard with more energy and viatality, and It’s a permanent job for me.Please let me know your decision as soon as possible at your convenient. Thank you for your time and consideration. Sincerely yours, Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam，
I’m writing this letter to see whether I meet the qualifications of the physician which is your hospital’s opening job.（一般招聘启事都会有关于应聘者的要求，所以建议简单的说一下你应聘的是哪个职位就好了） I noticed the news when I was searching for a job on the Internet.I have graduated from Nanjing University of Traditional Chinese Medicine for three years. Now I am a medical practitioner in a private hospital in Nanjing.,（去掉句号） and （加主语I）have more experiences in clinical practice. The work is pretty good, however, it's so far from my home of Luoyang. So working in Luoyang is my dream. If I got this opportunity, I will work hard with more energy and viatality（拼写错误）, and It’s（it’s） a permanent job for me.Please let me know your decision as soon as possible at your convenient（这里应该用名词convenience）. Thank you for your time and consideration. Sincerely yours, Li Ming点评：6分第二段需要更有条理，一条一条列出你的优势，另外建议去掉第二段最后一句，因为这句话给人感觉你现在没有尽全力工作。
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