考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(34)
考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam:
I'm writing this letter to apply for the solar energy project assistant persition that you have advertised on the webcite.
I noticed that you need someone that have physical background and the eager to study. My majoy in university is physics, I've leart all the essensial courses in physics. Also I have curiosity to everything that can interests me, including the reneable energy. I think I'm the suitable person for this persiton with my knowleage and hard working spirit.
I'll be appriciate that if you give me a chance to the interview. thank you for you to read this letter and I'm waiting for your letter.
have a nice day
yours sincerely
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam:（英语中用逗号） I'm writing this letter to apply for the solar energy project assistant persition（拼写错误） that you have advertised on the webcite（拼写错误）. I noticed that you need someone that have（它的主语是someone某人，所以这里应该用has） physical background and the eager to study. My majoy（拼写错误） in university is physics,（加连词and） I've leart（拼写错误） all the essensial（拼写错误） courses in physics. Also I have curiosity to everything that can interests（情态动词can后用动词原形） me, including the reneable（拼写错误） energy. I think I'm the suitable person for this persiton （拼写错误）with my knowleage（拼写错误） and hard working spirit. I'll be appriciate（拼写错误，这里需要一个形容词，appreciated） that if you give me a chance to the interview. thank（t大写）you for you to read this letter and I'm waiting for your letter（避免重复，改成reply）.have a nice day（这一部分去掉）【yours sincerely（y大写，最后加逗号：Yours sincerely，）Li Ming】（落款部分写在右下方）点评：5分在单词和格式上失分太多，其实这两方面都是可以避免的。第二段最好把两方面的内容简化一些，再加一条experience之类的内容，是你更有说服力。这是作文，不是真的求职信，所以要让你的内容有条理、充实、有说服力。
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