考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改(51)
考研英语复习资料：考研英语作文范文批改，新东方在线考研频道编辑整理，总有一篇适用你。考研英语待批改作文：
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writting the letter to apply for the position that your website proximately said you need a school doctor who undergraduate medical graduate.
Ibelieve in that i will be appropriate for thejob once you give me a chance.I am female who graduated from ** Medical University so i am not have the medically skill but also have patience and love that is inherent charavter of female. Particularly, i have been work in a chlidren hospital since i graduated, so i amexperienced. Maybe the most thing you concerned is why i quitthe job in the hospital. The key is, to contrastshool, the doctor in hospital istoo busy andtired to i take good care of my own chlidren,
I would like to express my gratitude for youkind consoderation of my application . I look forword to hearing from you soon,
Yours sincerely ,
Li Ming
考研英语作文批改点评如下：
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writting（拼写错误，writing） the letter to apply for the position that your website proximately said you need a school doctor who undergraduate medical graduate（这里表达的不好）. Ibelieve in（believe是相信，believe in是信任） that i（大写） will be appropriate for thejob once you give me a chance.I am female who graduated from ** Medical University so i（大写） am not have the medically（这里用形容词） skill but also have patience and love that is inherent charavter（拼写错误）of female. Particularly, i（大写） have been work in a chlidren（拼写错误）hospital since i（大写） graduated, so i（大写） amexperienced. Maybe the most thing（most important thing？） you concerned is why i（大写） quitthe job in the hospital. 【The key is, to contrastshool（拼写错误）, the doctor in hospital istoo busy andtired to i（大写） take good care of my own chlidren（拼写错误）,】（这个观点会让人认为也许你也因为累而辞去这份工作）I would like to express my gratitude for you（用所有格your）kind consoderation（拼写错误）of my application. I look forword（拼写错误）to hearing from you soon,（结尾用句号） Yours sincerely,Li Ming（落款位于右下角，两行内容不用离这么远）点评：4-5分要简洁扼要的写出有助于你得到这份工作的内容。
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